We have been busy collecting junk to mske an Iron Man. Enjoy reading our Haikus, see if you can spot the similies.
Apple Class post your Iron Man Haikus here.
Posted: January 12, 2012 in UncategorizedTags: apple class
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theironmancps 
The Iron Man stood.
His head was like a dustbin.
Eyes green and flashing.
Mrs Walsh what a lovely simile you have used, I will try to write one just as beautiful tonight.
I look foward to reading it!
Hi Apple Class,
Georgia has been teaching me how to write a Haiku!
Here goes:
Man made of metal,
His body cold like icy steel,
Will he ever wake?
x
OOOOOppps… too many syllables in one line.
Let me try again….. ;0)
Man made of metal,
His legs cold like icy steel,
Will he ever wake?
his heart was as bright as the sun
his hat as bright a keys
his eyes like shiny CD’s
his arms like bendy racks
By James
I like your poem it is good
James your poem is great
From Ewa
I like your poem James
THE iron man fell
his brain was like scrunched tin foul
his eyes were like bulbs
by Sky
Sky I your poem is cool
that is a very good poem sky
sky your poem is Cool
From Ewa
sorry that comment did’nt make sense
The iron, man stopped,
teeth are as,hard as red,tin
he is like,a man
by Ben Murphy
very good Ben, good use of syllabuls!!!!
Mum
thank you for the comment
love you mum
thank you for the comment
love you mum
well done ben i think yours is the best on the page
Ilike your poem Ben
Good poem Ben
Hands are like car keys.
His heart is like a panel
he stood like a cliff
by alex oliver
I like your poem Alex
From Ewa
your poem is good
Today I was in Apple Class and I had the pleasure of unveiling Iron Man……..he was covered in a secret black cloth. Afterwards I saw everyone writing their poems about him. Some are here on this blog. I thought I’d write something, please feel free to make your comments about my work!
Mr Curtis
Eyes alive like luminous rays,
Silicon circuits control the silent slave
Standing motionless awaiting my command!
Mr Curtis
(I think he needs some circuits to enable him to see you all! Don’t you think he needs some lights or buzzers to communicate with?)
Born today of pure metal,
All grey and cold to the touch,
Friend of foe, who knows?
Mr Curtis
(Not sure if I could trust a cold character like this? What do you think?)
well done Mr curtis you have done very well at your haiku
from Sky
good sky madi
Thank you for your contribution to our blog. We enjoyed reading your poems.
Well done Mr.Curtis!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
FromEwa
I will see what I can do about the lights Mr Curtis!
mrs walsh your poem is good
the iron man is cool
The Iron Man has
Ears as good as brightest tins
Eyes as dark as night
by Matthew
looking good
good poem matthew
YOUR POEM IS COOL BEN FROM Lewis
thank you
to ben i like your coment its the best ever from sam whitmore
Mrs Geddes has really enjoyed reading all the Haiku poems and the Cinquains and was so impressed she decided to have a go herself. Here it is:
Iron
Cold shiny
Standing gleaming glistening
Metallic monster
Menacing
Outstanding work Mrs Geddes!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you for your contribution.
I wrote a haiku at school but i have another one so here it goes
The Iron Man
The Iron Man fell,
He landed on the beach below,
He lay scattered down.
By Charlie Plumridge, Plum Class.
Vey good Charlie :0)
thank you Mrs Harris
mrs walsh this is my first hakiu here I go
the iron man
the iron man fell
battered on the beach he lay
broken legs and arms
well done lewis nice haiku congratulations on your first one
from charlie
allthough you had 1 to many lines was that your cinquin
😦
that just was the title charlie
the iron man stood
head like a massive dustbin
made of shiny iron
the iron man stopped
eyes green and flashing brightly
he is like a man
shame that we had to end the topic